tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2467807972565272661.post155007530005759220..comments2022-11-10T03:14:10.079-08:00Comments on Simply Scribblings: The most wonderful time of the year...Karen deBlieckhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11833882790709316409noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2467807972565272661.post-48151761055372664642011-05-22T20:40:03.826-07:002011-05-22T20:40:03.826-07:00Thanks for the candor ladies. I think both of you...Thanks for the candor ladies. I think both of you are right and I am taking another look at it. I will post a revision soon. :)Karen deBlieckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11833882790709316409noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2467807972565272661.post-90409850371693360342011-05-22T16:01:55.038-07:002011-05-22T16:01:55.038-07:00The pitch interests me, but I agree with Annie tha...The pitch interests me, but I agree with Annie that it seems a bit generic. What does her being a shepherdess have to do with anything? Who are her new-found friends? I know you can't tell us everything in such a reduced form, but I don't know if it is good to leave us asking these kinds of questions. <br /><br />But how exciting that you are going to the conference and will get a chance, we hope, to actually pitch your novel! Good luck!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2467807972565272661.post-79520105321588662052011-05-21T14:15:04.501-07:002011-05-21T14:15:04.501-07:00Hey Karen, it's Annie from Scribo. Thank you s...Hey Karen, it's Annie from Scribo. Thank you so much for the link. <br /><br />Elevator pitches are so hard to pull off! I think that's why we find formulas such as the one you used so helpful. I think your pitch does a good job at summarizing the novel, but I feel like I want more from it. To me, it seems a bit generic fantasy, when I know, from reading what we've critiqued so far, that it's so much more than that--this pitch focuses heavily on the plot, but I'm wondering if it might not be more appropriate to focus on the wonderful characters you've developed. <br /><br />It's the pitfall of a formula pitch, unfortunately, and the fact that none of us have more than thirty seconds to sell our work. But a pitch is meant to capture the heart and soul of our writing--why people would want to read it. And from my perspective, the main conflict between Aleph and Satariel is not the draw, but the vulnerability and journey of Rosalyn herself.<br /><br />Anyways, that's just my $0.02 :) I wish you the best of luck at the conference!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com